Written in a way it made me, your reader, read faster and faster as if addicted to your every word…I wanted to learn what specific thing caused the sadness of the first paragraph about losing your brother so many years early. When I got to the end, I too “felt deprived” because I had learned that two adult brothers quit having a relationship because the older one married a possessive woman who prevented him from having the relationship his heart hungered for…as shown by his early morning visits to his dear mother. Why oh why do individuals let all the person they marry, by threats or worse, to cause them to turn away from beloved family? I simply cannot understand how such a man as your brother who did HIS OWN THING while growing up, become a pawn in the hands/relationship with the woman he married. What a wimp!!
Great writing. Every phrase and sentence moves the message forward. Well done. I did not see an error or any part I would change. Every line counts and strengthens the message; and breaks the heart of your reader.
I hope you find a way one day to break down that wall she created and enjoy a brother to brother relationship.
Keep writing and let us know how the relationship re-grows so your heart is blessed.
From Ann on www.writing.com