My name is Lyn and I am doing a review for Simply Positive (on www.writing.com).
Please remember I am a writer, I know what it feels like to be reviewed! I have only my humble opinion to offer; please take what you feel is helpful and disregard the rest. Only YOU know what is right for your writing!
Title: About Cruelty
First Impression: My heart went out to the author immediately. What a horrific experience.
What I liked: Princess standing up to her father, and how she coped with the experience. It is not easy to step into a situation knowing what is at risk. That was very brave of the author.
What needs your attention: Nothing, that I noticed.
Favorite Parts: The night her mother finally called the police and stood up for herself and her daughter. I couldn’t help wondering why she had not before that. Maybe a bit more explanation why the mother did not help keep her daughter safe. That is unusual! Did the author ever talk with the mother about it, because those conversations would add a lot to the story.
Overall Impression: The story about domestic violence unfolded as I anticipated I know from personal experience what it is like to be a child in a house with volatile parents and then I married a man who felt it was his right to hit me. It took a while for me to break that cycle but I did it for my children. I am sorry that the author lost her first love. .
Thank you for letting me read your work. It was my pleasure!
From Lyn on www.writing.com