I discovered “My Brother” on the Read a Newbie page. The narrative moves the essay forward at a good pace describing how the author’s brother got the piano and learned to play without lessons. The main emotions of this essay are love and longing, which are expressed throughout by the way the author writes about her brother.
What I liked: There are several things that I like about this essay. Firs, I like this metaphor, with the hunger of the man deprived for years,because it is fresh, expressive, and describes in a few words how the author’s brother felt about music. Second, I like the way the author express her emotions and love for her brother through the narrative. Third, end of this essay brought tears to my eyes because of the way the author’s relationship with her brother ended. Forth, these are my favorite phrases, his magic was too powerful, his music too much like that of sirens, because they reveal the natural gift the author’s brother had for music.
Technical Issues or Typos: I found not typos or obvious technical problems.
Suggestions: I have no suggestions.
I enjoyed reading this intriguing essay. Write on.
From P. Snow on www.writing.com